Shishin {star bird} updated!

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Shishin {star bird} updated!

PostPosted by k-star » Thu Nov 26, 2009 12:00 pm

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Name of Character:
Nihonto Onoda
Name of Demon or Spirit:
Shishin-Phoenix

Location of the Seal:
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5-point star on Nihonto's chest

Demon/Spirit Gender:
Female

Demon/Spirit’s Age:
1500+

Looks:
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Shishin appears as a large 8ft tall flaming bird with 5 tails. Each of her tails are a mixture between gold. orange, and red with the gold being the strongest of the colors. They are said to represent each of its new lives meaning that Shishin is on her fifth life cycle and she is between 6000 and 7500 years old even though her body doesn't appear that old. Shishin has red eyes and talons that project from her head. Usually she is described as being all gold with red eyes because she radiates a visible golden aura that shines over her body.
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Personality:
The phoenix is not evil by any means, but most people are afraid of its power because they do not understand. The phoenix only fight's to protect itself and sometimes others if they are not a threat. The phoenix is very sensitive to the feelings of others and can tell if a person is harmful, or deceiving. It was usually found in areas near intense heat or where the sun shines most.
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Unlike most demons Shishin retains her elemental properties even after sealing. This allows Nihonto to use her elemental attributes while in his transformed state. However, this ability can only be used to an extent. At genin he can only manage to use C-rank fire jutsu. B-rank jutsu at chunnin. A-rank jutsu at jounin. S-rank jutsu at kage level.
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Shishin has 3 total elements with fire being the strongest, and even though Nihonto can only use 1 freely the seal has fused her elements into his transformations.
Wind-Fire-Flight


Skills/Specialties:
Shishin has many powers most of which are not revealed to Nihonto yet because of his level. However, even at his level the phoenix has given him many abilities.
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His first power is the ability to use the phoenix's stars. These stars protect Nihonto through the phoenix's will, because it is trapped within him. Anything potentially harming will trigger the formation of these stars, this is due to the phoenix's ability to tell if a person if harmful or not. This function takes no chakra from Nihonto and is instead powered by Shishin. Because Nihonto can not harness the full power of the phoenix their are set limits on the number of stars that can be formed.
At his current level only 3 stars can be formed and used. Once he reaches chunnin level he will be able to use up to 6 of the phoenix's stars. Finally at jounin he will be able to use up to 10 stars, however the final star must be formed with his own chakra, unlike the others which form by themselves. After the final star has been formed the first time he will no longer need to re-create it again. Jutsu involving these stars is limited to A-rank with the possibility of 1 S-rank jutsu at Jounin and 2 at Kage.
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When Nihonto is using the forms of the phoenix these stars affect the seal on his chest. His ability to use the stars is measured accurately by the number of points on the seal. Every point equals 2 stars. So if the seal had 4 points up to 8 stars could be formed.
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The second power is his ability to transform into Shishin, which has 3 forms with one full possession form.
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The first form will cause Nihonto to be surrounded by a ring of fire. Within this ring Nihonto will grow claws and his eyes will turn a crimson red, his skin will turn red from the build up of heat in his body. After the transformation is complete he will release a burst of chakra that will blow away the flames surrounding him. This burst has the potential to knock away incoming projectiles and blow away human sized structures that are in close proximity to him at the time.
After the transformation is complete Nihonto will gain enhanced speed and strength. He will also gain a 1/2 resistance to fire jutsu and a small chakra boost.
The chakra boost is about 1.5x his normal chakra.
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In the second form Nihonto will be surrounded by a ring of fire, but instead of just transforming in plain sight the fire will engulf he entire body. He will then change forms within the flames, growing claws, wings, and Shishins 5 tails, also his eyes will turn a crimson red. Once he completes his transformation into the second form he will blow away the flames with his wings and release a large gust of wind in the process. This gust of air is very hot and has the power to blow away human sized objects, weapons, projectiles, and burn the skin of living things that are close to him. This form grants Nihonto enhanced speed, strength, and endurance. Nihonto also gains a 3/4 resistance to normal fire jutsu, and a 1/2 resistance to advanced fire jutsu, also a 2x chakra boost. While Nihonto is in this form he gains the ability to fly for short distances, due to Shishin's element of Flight.
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The transformation to the final form begins with Nihonto becoming surrounded by the ring of fire like in the previous forms. Then he will become completely engulfed in flames like the second form, however these flames will change from a orange-red to a golden-orange color. After the flames change color a vortex of fire will rise from the ring of flames and hide Nihonto's body within them. In this vortex the golden flames will take the shape of Shishin and give Nihonto an armor of flames. The armor of flames completely hides his body from normal view and gives him protection. After the transformation is complete Nihonto will release a large wave of chakra,wind, and fire that will easily blow away trees, and boulders in close proximity to him. Anything that is easily flammable in this wind would catch flame, and things that aren't would become burnt or singed. This form grants Nihonto a great boost to speed, strength, endurance, stamina, and chakra. He will also become completely immune to normal fire jutsu, and only take 3/4 damage from advanced fire jutsu. The chakra boost is about 2.5x his normal chakra.
While in this form Nihonto will rarely be standing on the ground, instead he will almost always be flying in the air.
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If Nihonto is knocked out in any of his forms the phoenix will take over his body. While the phoenix is in control he will immediately turn to the final form of Shishin. The only way to know if Nihonto is possessed by Shishin is by looking at the star on his chest, which will have the image of the phoenix rising at its center. When Nihonto is under possession of Shishin he is immune to damage from the form itself, and once he is away from danger or he regains conscientious the form will diminish and he will take damage from the form he was in before he became knocked out.
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Nihonto also has the ability to use the wings of the phoenix outside of his forms but they will put a great strain on his back. He cannot use his wings in his first form however, and he will not be able to fly either. Instead he will only get a boost to his speed and jumping when using his wings outside of his forms.
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In his second form he can only fly for set amounts of time with limits.
Genin- Up to 3 posts
Chunnin- Up to 6 posts
Jounin- Up to 10 posts
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Each of Shishin's forms causes pain to Nihonto's body, increasing upon the level of the form. The pain from the burns is not heal-able and will last until the time has past. These burns will not show on his body, but instead he will feel the pain rather than sustain the actual injury. This prevents the pain from being treated by ordinary medical ninjutsu.
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The first form will cause him pain equal to a 1st degree burn for the same amount of time he spent in the form.
The second form will cause pain equal to a 2nd degree burn for 2x the amount of time he spent in the form.
The final form will cause pain equal to a 3rd degree burn for 3x the amount of time he spent in the form.
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Nihonto's final power is the ability to draw upon the starlight chakra of the phoenix's home, Shiro-hi. Starlight chakra is energy of healing and restoration, and it is said that coming in contact with this energy could heal even the most severe of wounds.
Nihonto cannot use this power yet because he hasn't the power or strength to hold its great energy. Once he becomes chunnin he will be able to call forth this power in small minorities like the phoenix does. At jounin he will be able to draw chakra directly from crux, to increase his own abilities. At kage level Nihonto will have full control over this power, but only for limited amounts of time because the power cannot be over used because it keeps crux stable. If he were to use too much of this power the phoenix would take over and block the flow of energy.
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In order for Nihonto to use this power he must sacrifice part of his chakra to the phoenix. The starlight chakra would then descend from Shiro-hi and envelop his body. While using this power Nihonto can be in 1 of 3 manifested forms. The first form will cause Nihonto to radiate with the white chakra. The second form will cause the chakra to cover his entire body and create an armor that turns all of his skin white. The final form causes Nihonto to take on the image of the phoenix in white aura similar to a tailed beasts cloak.

History/Background Story:
Shishin has been alive for many cycles of it's life, renewing itself after every 1500 year. It is known as the bird of the south and its home is a small star in the center of the crux constellation. This star is unknown to most people because of its unusually small size. The star is actually a balance of power between the 4 main stars of the crux constellation, and it also links Shishins life to the crux constellation. As long as the Shishin lives the star will exist and the constellation will remain stable. The star is called Shiro-hi which means white sun. Shiro-hi got its name from the fact that it is actually made completely of a special type of energy. This energy is know as starlight and it is the purest chakra in existance. This chakra is guarded by the phoenix because it is the source of all of its star power. Shishin uses its power in small minorities as it keeps crux stable, and using too much would put its home in danger.
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During its previous life cycle it came into contact with a dragon of darkness that attacked its home. The dragon intended to destroy the phoenix and use the starlight chakra to increase its own powers. Shishin fought to protect its home and keep the power from the dragon, but in the end the dragon proved itself to be much stronger that her. Shishin had no choice but to rely on the starlight chakra. After absorbing the starlight power she engaged in a battle with the dragon that lasted for many days. The dragon was enraged as now the power that he sought lied within Shishin and the rest of the power was lost to him. The battle was never settled but instead they clashed in a burst of energy that sent them crashing to earth. Shishin was now away from the dragon, but she was injured badly. She didn't have the strength to escape the pull of the planet, so she took refuge in a cave on the outskirts of sunagakure. There was no worry for the power because as long as she remained well the power could never be used by anyone but herself. There she rested her strength to not only preserve her life, but her home as well. Because if she were to die her home would be destroyed by the great power that lied within it.
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Shishin lived unknown to the world for many centuries until the Great Shinobi Wars began. The great mass of destruction and death caused it pain and sadness. The sorrow pushed her to help the world, but in the end nothing good came of her attempts.
The ninja villages attacked her and almost destroyed her, so she fled the battle to rest in the cave once more. No body ever found her and the villages wound up forgetting the incident completely on account of the search of tailed beasts. By this time she had been seriously injured twice, and thus 2 stars of the crux constellation had began to dim down. As these stars weakened so did the stability of crux. She could not afford to lose the 2 following stars so she kept herself hidden from the rest of the world for many more years.
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Shishin thrived within the cave for much more time until the ninja wars had ended. The ninja villages had captured their beasts and made their jinkirichi by this time. Shishin was preparing to leave the planet for her home once more, but out of her knowledge there had been many ninja's studying her and her powers while she slept in the cave. These ninja had been organizing an attempt to attack her and steal her powers ever since her attempt to stop the ninja wars. They waited quite sometime before they acted,about half a century, and with 4 ninja they defeated her and trapped her in a special scroll. Unfortunately the ninja had taken serious damage from the fight, and because they traveled in the dessert they had no choice but to head to sunagakure for treatment. They couldn't make it there, and being damaged as they were there wasn't much they could do. They walked until they were on the outskirts of sunagakure and they all wound up passing out from fatigue in the desert sand. Later the scroll was found by a young child, and Shishin was transferred from the scroll into the child's body. She now remained their dormant within the child until the seal completed manifesting itself within the child.
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Watching from the seal that imprisoned her as the child train himself for many years, she began to feel his willpower. The child always trained himself in the desert and pushed himself to achieve new limits. She began to grow attached to the child as he pushed himself. She wanted to help him but she was afraid that it would only cause problems. One day when he was out in the desert training after he had lost a spar with another ninja in his clan she decided to help him. Shishin gave him access to her powers and abilities, but she could only give him so much power. This power became the new focus of his training and it pushed him to new heights in his own abilities. Shishin now watches over the child as he grows in his life and she hopes the child will grow strong enough one day that she can grant him all of her power so that her home will remain stable, and the power will remain protected.


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Re: Shishin {star bird} updated!

PostPosted by Physalis |0083| » Wed Dec 02, 2009 9:15 pm

...Alright. But I don't see anything here on how he is able to access these forms. We really don't allow people to just pop into a demon form.

Also, those higher degree burns aren't like accidently tapping your finger on the burner on your stove. If this is a costant pain, I don't care who they are thier gonna pass out, it's honestly just a bit of common sense.

And to tell you the truth this is sure a hell of alot to be giving out, you're greatly pushing into the limits of what we should allow for a custom demon, and bordering on Bijuu wanna be, which we don't really like.
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Re: Shishin {star bird} updated!

PostPosted by k-star » Wed Dec 02, 2009 10:17 pm

um everything up here has been approved before on old nc besides the starlight chakra, elemental advantages, and the ability to actually fly because of the phoenix's elements.

If the seal isn't a good enough medium for his access of these abilities then what should I put down?
The transformation process was explained.... If you are referring to why he can use the forms without consent of Shishin then its because Shishin needs to make him stronger because if he dies then her home and the starlight chakra will be destroyed as well.
(I can edit the seal to make it so that the seal actually fuses her power into his body)

Before I updated this he actually had to use chakra to release the seal, but now I was making it so that the power could either be called out by him or unleashed by itself. Would you like me to edit that in or put the chakra consumption back in to play?


Also the pain thing.. I accurately listed the time limit for the burns and made it so they couldn't be healed.
Hmm... The forms themselves catch him on fire so the pain would be constant, but the degree of pain is watered down by the fire resistance in the forms. After he changes back the pain takes its full effect..

He won't pass out from pain until after he reverts which would cancel the "if he gets ko'ed in the form then shishin takes over" thing. Of course it is common sense which is why I did not put it in. It was supposed to be implied.
That prevents abuse of the forms and their possession fail-safe.

The starlight chakra thing is not accessible until chunnin so I thought that would be fine, along with the fact that he must use his own chakra in exchange to activate the power. (this would be set up as a jutsu rather than an ability)

I only put in the elements so this phoenix would be semi-unique from the others, and so he could fly in his advanced forms rather than only glide because he lacked the flight element.

Um... I don't know what to do about the bijuu wanna be thing. If there is a specific ability that you want removed please tell me.


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Re: Shishin {star bird} updated!

PostPosted by Tomoushii » Fri Dec 11, 2009 6:40 pm

your demon its powers and added effects are not acceptable as is... only bijuu can take over a body and give it a new chakra supply... minor demons must fit the rank of their host... along with the abilities accompanied by it...

you /will/ conduct the following edits or receive a denial stamp...

1. shorten and simplify your characters abilities through the demon, reduce them to activation of the seal and explain how /exactly/ the powers are activated and /exactly/ what the positive and negative effects of each power is on the character... [please realize i know you have these elements in most of your profile, but they are not present in each and certainly not very clear in each...

2. remove the ability of your character to use elements in his transformations that are not natural, this is an ability that is not even given by canon bijuu and /only/ available in bijuu here on nc...

i'm sorry to be firm like this, but your argument against phy and its tone suggests that it is the only way that i can quickly resolve the matter for you... please understand that me and phy work as mods to make sure that profiles are approved but also that they remain fair for other players under the rules of the forum...

you can ask questions all you want because we are hear to answer them... but refusal to cooperate is totally unacceptable...

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Re: Shishin {star bird} updated!

PostPosted by k-star » Fri Dec 11, 2009 7:01 pm

I wasn't trying to be rude or uncooperative... If i came across that way sry. I was trying to understand specifically what abilities were not acceptable and why I couldn't use them.

By unnatural elements do you mean the starlight chakra or all elements that my character does not naturally posses?

you said to shorten my abilities and reduce them, are these abilities ok?

1: protection via stars
(the number of stars has been limited by rank. 3 at genin 6 at chunnin 9 at jounin and 1 that must be created by the character himself)
2: transformations
(should these be limited by rank?) [also should the chakra boost be removed?]

It will take me a while to re type everything again and make appropriate adjustments based on how much needs to be modified. After all abilities that are acceptable are weeded out I will retype this and bump.


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Re: Shishin {star bird} updated!

PostPosted by Tomoushii » Sat Dec 12, 2009 10:24 am

take your time, bc getting it right is just as important as getting into rping with it

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