Limited time only! Tsuneh's AMAZING PLOTHAT

Links to different translators, or other aids for the site will be posted here. Users can come in this board to create his or her own tutorial for the rest of the site to look at and critique!

Re: Limited time only! Tsuneh's AMAZING PLOTHAT

PostPosted by Shadow » Sat Jun 09, 2012 3:45 pm

Tsuneo wrote:Shadow: Similar questions for you. He seems to be pretty talented for 13, how was he trianed? What motivates him to be a shinobi and fight for Oto?



she was chosen to be one of 12 guru's for her clan, and to represent the Gemini constellation, which exhibits intellectual, eloquent, cunning, witty, inquisitive behavior.

nothing special motivates her except she was born into being a guru and with guru comes clan training so that she can protect not only herself, but others too. being a shinobi is what she has always knows and she has no desire to be anything else.
"The flow of time is always cruel... its speed seems different for each person, but no one can change it... A thing that does not change with time is a memory of younger days..." ~ Sheik
Image
"It is something that grows over time... a true friendship. A feeling in the heart that becomes even stronger over time. The passion of friendship will soon blossom into a righteous power and through it, you will know which way to go... This song is dedicated to the power of the heart." ~ Sheik
User avatar
Shadow
Site Veteran
Site Veteran
 
Posts: 2230
Joined: Tue Jul 28, 2009 9:40 pm
Gender: Male

Re: Limited time only! Tsuneh's AMAZING PLOTHAT

PostPosted by Fang » Sat Jun 09, 2012 4:31 pm

He was raised as a ward of Yuki, long before the village (and himself) found out he was an Uchiha. He enlisted in local police force out of a sense of duty out of gratitude. No dreams other then living his days out generally trying to keep the peace and defend the people of the village.


He is generally happy with where he is in life... And that's the problem xD. He is near completely static, with no motivations to do anything, great or otherwise. And I can't seem to find a way to motivate him that wouldn't just turn him into an emo/angry crybaby . I want him to aspire greatness but at the same time, I don't want to turn him into a power-hungry, chaotic, selfish Douche bag. I want him to be like a quiet, kind-hearted, war veteran kind of person. A feeling that comes to my mind is that of "Redemption" or maybe even "Salvation".
User avatar
Fang
Active Member
Active Member
 
Posts: 407
Joined: Sun Mar 06, 2011 1:32 pm
Location: Closest place to hell in the world.
Gender: Male

Re: Limited time only! Tsuneh's AMAZING PLOTHAT

PostPosted by Art » Sun Jun 10, 2012 6:43 am

Fighting Vs. Dress Making:

I think more so her reason for being a fighter would be due to her rejection of dress making.

Being both stubborn and basically a perfectionist, i feel she would have a hard time transfering her ideas and designs from just ideas to actual products... Always fixing adjusting and redoing... nevering meeting her expectations and never happy with the final result. Pairing that with the experience of a high stress fashion internship would bring her to the end. Having her feel like she is struggling and failing at somthing that should be easy for her... Kinda like when you feel a hobby (or somthing you like) stops bring you enjoyment and starts to feel more like a chore. I think she would also have a hardtime parting with anything she made... almost like it was apart of her.

... Honestly i can totally see her becomming a shinobi, because a friend did it... Like wanting to make sure they were safe.
User avatar
Art
Site Fanatic
Site Fanatic
 
Posts: 863
Joined: Sun Oct 18, 2009 1:33 am
Gender: Male

Re: Limited time only! Tsuneh's AMAZING PLOTHAT

PostPosted by Tsuneo » Mon Jun 11, 2012 5:10 pm

Hanya: If we had villages that were doing more things that would definitely work. However, no one runs any events nowadays, so you have to generate your own stuff.


Shadow: I only vaguely remember this clan and their backstory. Do you have control of the clan? If not, is the person who invented still hanging around, or could we abuse it to our own benefit since no one is here to bother us about it?


Fang: Ah, you begin to see the difficulties xD

If you want Redemption, you gotta have him screw up first. This is actually a really fun story to tell, and it can be done without turning him into a Sasuke-clone, which is I think what you're afraid of doing?

One way to do that is to have him set-up. Create a situation where he is blamed for a situation. The best way to do that is to actually have the /actions/ be real, but the /motivations/ be fabricated.

Example: Takeo is sent to blow a train, killing all aboard. He was told that the train had baddies, it was really full of children. Now Takeo is on the run, wanted for something he actually did (he blew up the train) but not for the reasons they thought (he didn't want to kill children.)

The reason you want this is that you want it to be difficult to prove himself innocent. It's much harder to do that when you actually did the action.

Now you can create a story where he has to try and find out who set him up and why while at the same time trying to prove to Yuki that he's a good person. That sounds like an awesome story!


Art: Oooh, very good, very good, that's an excellent understanding of character! Great job!

So shinobi-ing becomes the backup plan and she finds out she's actually pretty good at it. One way to go would be to make the “friend” an NPC, and in your first thread kill that NPC off. Now she's failed at hprotecting her friend, or maybe she's seeking revenge? I don't know, but that's a good way to shock her out of her stupor and move on to taking the whole thing seriously. Revenge is always a good story cause it generates an arc and a bad guy and gives you the moral dillema of “should I take revenge or let it go?”

Considering you're in Oto, this could be even more potent.
Tsuneo
Old Man
 
Posts: 2778
Joined: Sun Aug 16, 2009 11:32 pm
Gender: Male

Re: Limited time only! Tsuneh's AMAZING PLOTHAT

PostPosted by Kiyoshi » Mon Jun 11, 2012 6:56 pm

Helpful Kiyoshi Moment!

If I remember right, the clan Shadow is talking about was controlled by Ryu.
User avatar
Kiyoshi
General Kiyo Jackassery
 
Posts: 1042
Joined: Fri Jul 24, 2009 2:28 pm
Location: Wishing I was somewhere else.
Gender: Male

Re: Limited time only! Tsuneh's AMAZING PLOTHAT

PostPosted by Shadow » Mon Jun 11, 2012 10:50 pm

Tsuneo wrote:
Shadow: I only vaguely remember this clan and their backstory. Do you have control of the clan? If not, is the person who invented still hanging around, or could we abuse it to our own benefit since no one is here to bother us about it?

.


WE CAN ABUSE IT.

ryu is leader and i think he's mia/ wouldn't care if we abuse it :P
"The flow of time is always cruel... its speed seems different for each person, but no one can change it... A thing that does not change with time is a memory of younger days..." ~ Sheik
Image
"It is something that grows over time... a true friendship. A feeling in the heart that becomes even stronger over time. The passion of friendship will soon blossom into a righteous power and through it, you will know which way to go... This song is dedicated to the power of the heart." ~ Sheik
User avatar
Shadow
Site Veteran
Site Veteran
 
Posts: 2230
Joined: Tue Jul 28, 2009 9:40 pm
Gender: Male

Re: Limited time only! Tsuneh's AMAZING PLOTHAT

PostPosted by Tolkien » Tue Jun 12, 2012 1:03 am

Sounds like a lot of fun man I love to get and share great ideas..makes me a better writer and rp'er.

Name: Ken Andorus

Village/Age: Wanderer/19

BRIEF Combat Overview: short hand weaponry combat skills, using water jutsus, and learning his clan ability of manipulating a substance called "Dark Water"

General Personality and the Like: Ken is of royalty (His Andorus clan is based in Iwa, and they have a sort of monarchy within their clan) Ken Andorus is a prince and left his clan to become a wanderer and find himself. The clan in his opinion is too submissive (during this time was when Maceon windu was Kage) to the Kage and felt that the way of life in his clan was not for him and that there was more for him out there. Also especially after a major incident in which he lost his fiancee, the one woman he loved, to the strange substance of Dark Water in which members of the Andorus clan have the ability to manipulate. To this day, he believes that she may still be alive and this is also a reason for him to run away from his clan. Socially, known to a lot of people that he has been around, he is a smooth talking player.Has all the pick up lines and dating tricks down pact. His royalty from his clan helps his social skills a lot. Little do many know, that his many women that he has relations with, are his way of getting over the loss of his fiancee. Got a lot more just let me know if you want some more info.

Do you have a set goal in mind? If so, what is it?: Ken is a wanderer and sort of a free spirit. Don't see Ken really joining any villages, but organizations are fine. Eventually I want to get into a plot involving more in detail on what happened to his fiancee and answering the question of whether she lived or not, but that is far down the line....basically no immediate goal in mind.

Is there something in particular that has you stuck?: MMM..yes..and no...maybe with finding other areas of major plot aside from the Dark Water relation. Something new yet helps to develop his character internally. Kinda hard to describe..Not really sure, I just wanted to have fun with this. Just throw what comes to mind.
Tolkien
Site Fanatic
Site Fanatic
 
Posts: 855
Joined: Thu Oct 22, 2009 8:30 am
Location: San Antonio, TX
Gender: Male

Re: Limited time only! Tsuneh's AMAZING PLOTHAT

PostPosted by Art » Wed Jun 20, 2012 1:32 am

Dear Tsu,

Im actually really like this proposed ideal! Although if i go the revenge route... Do you have any tips trick or suggestion to keep my villian/opposing force fresh, new and interesting?
User avatar
Art
Site Fanatic
Site Fanatic
 
Posts: 863
Joined: Sun Oct 18, 2009 1:33 am
Gender: Male

Re: Limited time only! Tsuneh's AMAZING PLOTHAT

PostPosted by Unwritten » Wed Jun 20, 2012 3:10 pm

Name: Kaito

Village/Age: Sora, age 14

BRIEF Combat Overview: He uses puppets, and as of now he only has one offensive puppet, so I was figuring the best way he would fight would be keeping on a constant offensive. I haven't fought with him yet, but that's my over all plan.

General Personality and the Like: He is fairly calm besides the small instances where he may be a bit immature. He is pretty level headed except when a situation gets to him and then he becomes flustered and from that point he can be hazardous to himself since he begins to make dumb mistakes.

Do you have a set goal in mind? If so, what is it?: I haven't thought too far ahead, but I want him to become apart of a team, or if teams are rare to come by I would like for him to have a couple people that are re-occurring and not just random encounters, or simple spars. Over all I don't have any big plans for him yet, but that's the over all idea right now.

Is there something in particular that has you stuck?: I have always enjoyed roleplaying, but I fear that I have never been very good at it, so I believe that will be a major problem. That and finding a team. I'm not entirely sure how to do it, but I haven't looked that hard, so I could probably figure that out on my own.
Unwritten
New User
New User
 
Posts: 9
Joined: Thu Jun 14, 2012 3:53 pm

Re: Limited time only! Tsuneh's AMAZING PLOTHAT

PostPosted by Tsuneo » Sat Jun 23, 2012 11:18 pm

Shadow: Kay, easy sauce. Have someone either take away/disable her star powers, or make the source/reasons behidn them different than she thought. Too much of her identity is wrapped up here, so if you remove it or damage it, she'll be forced to find out who she really is, which is always a good story and full of interesting things to do!

Tolkien: Introduce new girl, have him fall in love and forget about the last chick, have fiancee show up later with some crazy circumstances as to her disappearance, and then have Ken stuck between his new love, his old love, his sense of duty, and the desire to solve the mystery as to why she was taken from him in the first place.

Bonus points if you include his clan somewhere.

Art: The best villains are not evil: they simply are normal characters working for a goal that's opposite the protagonist. That makes the situation more heart-wrenching for the readers, because they root for both sides.

UW: Okay, I want you to read this again very carefully.

General Personality and the Like: He is fairly calm besides the small instances where he may be a bit immature. He is pretty level headed except when a situation gets to him and then he becomes flustered and from that point he can be hazardous to himself since he begins to make dumb mistakes.


Do you see what you wrote?

Calm but immature.
Level-headed but panicky.

These are contradictions.

This is what a younger writer does when he doesn't want to make a character cliche. Makes them soooo well rounded that they drift into boring, because they aren't anything at all. You can't make a story here because they're like a big blank sheet of paper: lots of possibility, but absolutely no direction at all.

Go back, make some solid decisions about this character. Pick two or three characteristics and make them extreme. Then we'll chat.
Tsuneo
Old Man
 
Posts: 2778
Joined: Sun Aug 16, 2009 11:32 pm
Gender: Male

Re: Limited time only! Tsuneh's AMAZING PLOTHAT

PostPosted by kimahri_ronso » Sun Jun 24, 2012 9:06 pm

Name: Heishin Nazitura

Village/Age: [Yukigakure] [10]

BRIEF Combat Overview: Heishins' battle style is based more upon combining basic academy techniques because that is really all he knows. He is a weapons specialist, but he has his own personal issues with fighting and he is used to being cut off from weapons by his parents.

General Personality and the Like: Heishin is a 'church boy' with a sense of adventure. He doesn't like to fight, but he does like to train and to spar with others, though he takes it too seriously and usually punishes himself afterwards. He is truly loving and will aid just about anybody, but he is also shy and tries to stay out of the lime light. He doesn't have many friends, but when he finds somebody he cares about he feels like it is his duty to impress them in any way. Heishins' generally seeks to serve others, because he is so used to not being able to do what he wants.

Do you have a set goal in mind? If so, what is it?: I want Heishin to mature so that I can create a complex plot for him. I have some tragedies ahead for him, but these are dependent upon other role players. (reference to the 'he seeks to please others'.) I plan on using his manipulative demon to push him forward in those times of stagnancy.

Is there something in particular that has you stuck?: What would be the best way to get Heishin to mature on his own? Not a full on adult, because I want him to remain innocent, but a way to make him take up his own perspective on the world and people in it?

1 2 3 4 5 Image 5 4 3 2 1


Spoiler:
¤ø„¸¨°º¤ø„¸¸„ø¤º°¨¸„ø¤º°¨

¨°º¤ø„¸DUBSTEP„ø¤º°¨

„ø¤º°¨FOREVER`°º¤ø,,

Spoiler:
"[Nihil Timendum Est - The 50th Law]"
[x] [x] [x] [x] [x] [x] [x] [x] [x] [x] [x]
User avatar
kimahri_ronso
Active Member
Active Member
 
Posts: 580
Joined: Thu Jul 22, 2010 11:18 pm
Location: The World.

Previous

Return to The Classroom

Who is online

Users browsing this forum: No registered users and 0 guests

cron