Half heart dragon seal (done)

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Half heart dragon seal (done)

PostPosted by Azumi » Tue Dec 08, 2009 12:53 pm

Name of Character: Azumi

Name of Demon or Spirit: Drako Calcifer

Location of the Seal: A large scar over the heart

Demon/Spirit Gender: Male

Demon/Spirit’s Age: 800

Looks: what does this demon look like?… Drako looks like a bulky red and tan dragon, his plate scales alon his belly and neck is seperated like most dragons and can be lifted.
how does this demon/spirit appear in real life?… just the same but never as strong as he was when he's heart was complate. he would only be as strong as his 'host'
can it be seen by anybody but your character?… oh yes any one can see him as long as you can find him lurking around.

Personality: If he was humen he'd be most like a knight of old, loyal and unyealeding to acts of hate or evil. This dragon lived by a code of valor and honor; even so he did have moments of dout and dispare. Drako has strong wit to his wisdom that can be confused for cold sarcasism if you don't understand it

Skills/Specialties: telepathic link to the resipeint of the dragon's half heart, for drako's case the abilty to use fire element a little better (meaning 10% better if that) then normal mainly like a dragon, like spiting small flames for example (in most other cases it would be of the dragon's element that donates the heart that gains in power with in the 'host's' body)

History/Background Story:
This seal was used for atlest 800 years because Drako remebered it being used when he was just a youngling dragon. Born of dragon's bound by honor of those before them; the seal was used as an emergency fall back if the dragon's human compainon had a fatle wound theyed cut out the heart of the human and replace it with half of their own alowing them to survive and heal. Drako used this on his close friends daughter when she and him had been attacked one day and she had be stabed though the heart. the great dragon asked the father if he could use that seal because it would be a perminet thing, the girl would be asking for death if she removed the half heart. now drako removed the heart of the girl and lifted the plate scale over his heart and removed half of his heart. the wound he had caused to pace it in her cheast closed near instently and now she sleeped for the day in the care of a dragon of the old codes.

It was said that a prince was ran though on a spike and a dragon that knew the kights code of honor gave the man half of his heart so he'd live on and protect his kingdom. he did.

Azumi R. (ebony)~ Rhys C.L~ Aria~ Dark~ DRAKON~

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Spoiler:

"Then put headphones on your heart
And then turn the volume up
Let the rhythm throb in time
With the pumping of your blood
And the music heals
Where the cracks have started
So once again
You will be whole hearted"~ by LEENI

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The law of the land,
Those living for death
Will die by their own hand.

Life's no ordeal
If you come to terms.
Reject the system
Dictating the norms

From dehumanization to arms, production
To hasten this nation
Towards it's destruction

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Re: Half heart dragon seal (done)

PostPosted by Love » Tue Dec 08, 2009 10:30 pm

Your looks department is a tad short. The questions from the templates are really meant to be only a guide, not an actual Q/A session. Because of that, I didn't count them in the word count since you didn't write them.

I'd suggest that you just do away with the questions and write your response to that section in paragraph format, expanding on what you have there to meet the word requirements.

Other then that, could be me a bit more specific in the skills section. 10% better isn't really a clear means of measurement here since its rare to find a character that could be considered average? Also, is fire the only element you will ever be able to use because of this?
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Re: Half heart dragon seal (done)

PostPosted by Azumi » Wed Dec 09, 2009 12:16 am

will make corrections as fast as i can and thank you for your time

Azumi R. (ebony)~ Rhys C.L~ Aria~ Dark~ DRAKON~

song of the week


Image


Spoiler:

"Then put headphones on your heart
And then turn the volume up
Let the rhythm throb in time
With the pumping of your blood
And the music heals
Where the cracks have started
So once again
You will be whole hearted"~ by LEENI

ImageImageImage

A Perfeat Circle wrote:Power is power,
The law of the land,
Those living for death
Will die by their own hand.

Life's no ordeal
If you come to terms.
Reject the system
Dictating the norms

From dehumanization to arms, production
To hasten this nation
Towards it's destruction

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Re: Half heart dragon seal (done)

PostPosted by Love » Wed Dec 09, 2009 9:46 pm

NP, just bump this when you're done with the changes.
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