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PostPosted by Kaitou » Sat Dec 05, 2009 12:14 pm

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Name of Character: Hantaa Hiero and Eta-naru Kaitou
Name of Demon or Spirit: Fuhengenri - Universal Principle//Chakra
Location of the Seal: A birthmark usually found on the inner thigh
Demon/Spirit Gender: None
Demon/Spirit’s Age: Unknown
Looks: If one were to catch this cosmic substance before it has infiltrated the body of the newborn child it could only be described as a floating mass of energy. They can come in any form, color, or appearance yet the fact remains the same that if one were to touch this source of energy before it has been placed within its host, they would surely lose their life. When this energy is later manifested it can be of any color, however the usual color spectrum ranges somewhere between blue or black. This energy remains undetectable by any means unless it has manifested itself. Although, those with keen detection skills may be able to presume a great force lies within carries of this cosmic source of energy.
Personality: It is completely neutral to all forms of stimulus. It has been known to align itself with the noblest of creatures as well as the vilest of beings. The only criteria that must be met before it melds with a living being is that it be done shortly after birth and it must "feel" just right. Because of this selective process it is often a rarity to see Fuhengenri manifest itself within a large number of creatures. In fact anything outside of three within one generation is near impossible.
Skills/Specialties: Like its name implies, Fuhengenri is a wandering principle of energy throughout the entire universe. Those who are lucky enough to receive this gift at birth are given a power the ancients believed was the ability to change the fates. Because of their lack of understanding they believed carriers of this seemingly boundless energy to be children of destiny whose significance was to one day rule over the governing powers and usher in an age of peace. However, within this day an age it has been found to be quite a different story. The few who even know of its existence now realize that the Fuhengenri are simply wandering pockets of cosmic power that grant those they have chosen a higher threshold of chakra output than would be normally applicable to a creature. There is a theory going around that Kisame himself could have been the result of such a creature, but it's widely unsupported by most of the followers since there are differences between the infamous shinobi and holders of this power source.

Fuhengenri grants those in its possession an increase in chakra capacity as a passive ability, roughly double the chakra capacity of an average shinobi of their rank. It should be noted that these would not reset the technique limitations of a genin and chuunin concerning their B and S ranks. They would simply squander all of that chakra on that one technique. The reason for this being the fact that they are incapable of manipulating the strength of their chakra until they mature properly and have had a fair amount of time learning to control these abilities. That however is only the dormant abilities of carriers of the Fuhengenri. When those who carry it find themselves moments from death's door for the first time, the great power that resides inside of them will completely manifest in its entirety. If in combat a force blast of their primary element will radiate outwards in a five meter radius of their body, before the air is permeated with the strength of the cosmic energy flowing from within them. From that point they are granted the use of a greater chakra source than they were previously capable of bringing out for a set period of time before fainting will occur. While in the past it had been miscalculate into being a limitless source, research has proven the increase to simply be a double portion of the individual's usual chakra output. Upon waking their chakra will be sealed for a time [ Five IC posts of healing must be done before chakra is once more available to them]. [Genin - Two posts of universal chakra access] [Chuunin - Four posts of universal chakra access ] [ Jounin - Six posts of universal chakra access ] [Jounin+ - Eight posts of universal chakra access ] | It should be noted that those without the specialty of chakra capacity will have these access limits halved.

Penalties - Besides those clearly described above upon first manifestation of this ability the user will assume a beserker type mentality where they will aggressively seek out any hostile stimulus and attempt to remove it from existence. At the same time any use of this chakra can obviously not be hidden, essentially giving away their natural position from that point forward. There also seems to be a side effect among those who have manifested the ability of the secondary use to "hear" or "perceive" events, whether they be great or small, throughout the universe. For example they could randomly hear a mother giving birth in a nearby village or see the death of a star in some far off galaxy. One could imagine how it would be easy to lose their grip on reality with these occurrences. There is another side effect of a strange manifestation within the eyes that would clearly let another know something otherworldly is in effect, but these change depending on each individual.

However, the real issue with the use of the untapped potential of the fuhengenri [ Universal Chakra Access ] is the fact that in its basest form it is completely unnatural to the body of the individual. In fact each and every time they make use of its active state removes one year from their life, basically aging them rapidly as the tradeof for making use of their dormant abilities. Abuse of this power comes with severe consequences since they are further damaging their bodies by having the simply flood of chakra raging through their system. Use of it more than twice within a given period of time [ One OoC month ] will result in a cancerous mutation of the skin which spreads outwards from their "birthmark", along with the individual losing their sight for the rest of that month. Four instances of this occurring will directly result in complete skin deterioration to the point where their body will be covered from head to toe with cancerous sores.

History/Background Story:

"...It traveled far and wide, always seeking those that would become its masters. How many millenia had it been since the upstart had been spouted from the depths of some far off star was still unknown, yet in the core of its being there was the belief of some purpose. So, it searched. Through the cold embrace of space, drifting around the gravitational pull of its high powered cousins, breaking the atmosphere of vast worlds far beyond, and so on and so forth until finally it made its way to this big blue planet we like to call Earth. Once here the creature picked its champion for at last it had found the one that fit just right. There it lie resting until a time of need where its host would call it forth to do great and mighty works that would leave its audience in wonder and marvel. It would be the first of three to visit this wide blue land. In a trinity that bounced from one generation to the other, seeking, pursuing, until they found the ones that fit just right..."
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Re: [ - Masters of the Universe - ]

PostPosted by Love » Tue Dec 08, 2009 11:21 pm

A demon can only be sealed within one person, and yet you have two names listed here.

You can't form a connection with a canon. It would be better that you remove the line about Kisame to avoid implying things that should not be implied.

The chakra level increases you describe here are far too large. Kisame was shown to have the amount of chakra of a 4-tailed transformation state of the Kyuubi. No demon is allowed to have the chakra of a Bijuu, which this would be giving you, even at a Genin level.

Completely remove the thing about 'boundless chakra'. Only the Kyuubi has that.

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Re: [ - Masters of the Universe - ]

PostPosted by Kaitou » Wed Dec 09, 2009 12:58 am

Love wrote:A demon can only be sealed within one person, and yet you have two names listed here.
That's because it's not a demon. These are merely what could be likened to random occurrences of cosmic rays that by one means or the other combines with the physical being of a newborn child. I used the demon format since there was really no other to describe what I was going for here.

You can't form a connection with a canon. It would be better that you remove the line about Kisame to avoid implying things that should not be implied. I like to quantify things with more detail than x person gains a lot of chakra because that doesn't tell me anything. Kisame is the generic rubric used in the Naruto world to classify a person with a large amount of chakra.

The chakra level increases you describe here are far too large. Kisame was shown to have the amount of chakra of a 4-tailed transformation state of the Kyuubi. No demon is allowed to have the chakra of a Bijuu, which this would be giving you, even at a Genin level. Kisame gets that with the Samehada's help. His original values are said to be below a no tailed Bijuu. If you bothered to read it Genin aren't necessarily given access to the full extent of that anyway.

Completely remove the thing about 'boundless chakra'. Only the Kyuubi has that. Again, if you read it there are limitations, making it quite the opposite of boundless.

Overall, your reach far exceeds your grasp. It is not this easy to become Kisame.
Keep the name calling to a minimum since I would rather have this be a pleasurable experience.


All that being said I've made adjustments since it looks like i'll have to be dealing with a jutsu mod on this concept of mine. The edits should cover all of your basis of worry, since i'm pretty sure your main concern is to preserve the right of those who hold bijuu. No worries, the all powerful bijuu holders have no need to concern themselves with the insignificant chakra as such as these.

Edit: I increased the penalties to an even greater extent for that extra story-related spice.

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Re: [ - Masters of the Universe - ]

PostPosted by Love » Wed Dec 09, 2009 10:21 pm

It doesn't matter if you call it a demon, spirit, or a flying spaghetti monster. If it is in this section, then it goes by the standards of the template in use. This means one entity, one host. This thing cannot be sealed between two of your characters. Something like this can't just be chalked up to a random birth-trait.

Kisame without Samehada would possess no more chakra then a normal Jounin. However, your edits to your terminology are more then sufficient. My only concern is that tripling chakra is a bit much. A character with triple normal levels will never tire, save for if they were a Genin using their B-rank. [BTW, I like that you already had addressed that issue.] I'd suggest that you only double the amount of passive chakra the character has within them.

Also, I am not a jutsu mod!
I'm a Suna mod, which means I'm qualified to tell you if something is sand or not.
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Re: [ - Masters of the Universe - ]

PostPosted by Kaitou » Thu Dec 10, 2009 8:21 am

Fair enough Mistress of the Sand.
With the exception of one thing, I think there is a misunderstanding that this is a singular "creature". It's not the same creature sealed into two different sources it's two creatures, currently, sealed into two different sources. This natural "coincidence" happens on the principles of a trinity which means there's a third Fuhengenri embedded in another individual out there in the wide world [ That won't be any of my characters ]. It's a natural phenomenon that happens to occur in bouts of three to each generation.

"...It would be the first of three to visit this wide blue land. In a trinity that bounced from one generation to the other, seeking, pursuing, until they found the ones that fit just right..."

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Re: [ - Masters of the Universe - ]

PostPosted by Love » Fri Dec 11, 2009 7:42 pm

Kaitou wrote:

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Name of Character: Hantaa Hiero and Eta-naru Kaitou
Name of Demon or Spirit: Fuhengenri - Universal Principle//Chakra
Location of the Seal: A birthmark usually found on the inner thigh
Demon/Spirit Gender: None
Demon/Spirit’s Age: Unknown
Looks: If one were to catch this cosmic substance before it has infiltrated the body of the newborn child it could only be described as a floating mass of energy. They can come in any form, color, or appearance yet the fact remains the same that if one were to touch this source of energy before it has been placed within its host, they would surely lose their life. When this energy is later manifested it can be of any color, however the usual color spectrum ranges somewhere between blue or black. This energy remains undetectable by any means unless it has manifested itself. Although, those with keen detection skills may be able to presume a great force lies within carries of this cosmic source of energy.
Personality: It is completely neutral to all forms of stimulus. It has been known to align itself with the noblest of creatures as well as the vilest of beings. The only criteria that must be met before it melds with a living being is that it be done shortly after birth and it must "feel" just right. Because of this selective process it is often a rarity to see Fuhengenri manifest itself within a large number of creatures. In fact anything outside of three within one generation is near impossible.
Skills/Specialties: Like its name implies, Fuhengenri is a wandering principle of energy throughout the entire universe. Those who are lucky enough to receive this gift at birth are given a power the ancients believed was the ability to change the fates. Because of their lack of understanding they believed carriers of this seemingly boundless energy to be children of destiny whose significance was to one day rule over the governing powers and usher in an age of peace. However, within this day an age it has been found to be quite a different story. The few who even know of its existence now realize that the Fuhengenri are simply wandering pockets of cosmic power that grant those they have chosen a higher threshold of chakra output than would be normally applicable to a creature. There is a theory going around that Kisame himself could have been the result of such a creature, but it's widely unsupported by most of the followers since there are differences between the infamous shinobi and holders of this power source.

Fuhengenri grants those in its possession an increase in chakra capacity as a passive ability, roughly double the chakra capacity of an average shinobi of their rank. It should be noted that these would not reset the technique limitations of a genin and chuunin concerning their B and S ranks. They would simply squander all of that chakra on that one technique. The reason for this being the fact that they are incapable of manipulating the strength of their chakra until they mature properly and have had a fair amount of time learning to control these abilities. That however is only the dormant abilities of carriers of the Fuhengenri. When those who carry it find themselves moments from death's door for the first time, the great power that resides inside of them will completely manifest in its entirety. If in combat a force blast of their primary element will radiate outwards in a five meter radius of their body, before the air is permeated with the strength of the cosmic energy flowing from within them. From that point they are granted the use of a greater chakra source than they were previously capable of bringing out for a set period of time before fainting will occur. While in the past it had been miscalculate into being a limitless source, research has proven the increase to simply be a double portion of the individual's usual chakra output. Upon waking their chakra will be sealed for a time [ Five IC posts of healing must be done before chakra is once more available to them]. [Genin - Two posts of universal chakra access] [Chuunin - Four posts of universal chakra access ] [ Jounin - Six posts of universal chakra access ] [Jounin+ - Eight posts of universal chakra access ] | It should be noted that those without the specialty of chakra capacity will have these access limits halved.

Penalties - Besides those clearly described above upon first manifestation of this ability the user will assume a beserker type mentality where they will aggressively seek out any hostile stimulus and attempt to remove it from existence. At the same time any use of this chakra can obviously not be hidden, essentially giving away their natural position from that point forward. There also seems to be a side effect among those who have manifested the ability of the secondary use to "hear" or "perceive" events, whether they be great or small, throughout the universe. For example they could randomly hear a mother giving birth in a nearby village or see the death of a star in some far off galaxy. One could imagine how it would be easy to lose their grip on reality with these occurrences. There is another side effect of a strange manifestation within the eyes that would clearly let another know something otherworldly is in effect, but these change depending on each individual.

However, the real issue with the use of the untapped potential of the fuhengenri [ Universal Chakra Access ] is the fact that in its basest form it is completely unnatural to the body of the individual. In fact each and every time they make use of its active state removes one year from their life, basically aging them rapidly as the tradeof for making use of their dormant abilities. Abuse of this power comes with severe consequences since they are further damaging their bodies by having the simply flood of chakra raging through their system. Use of it more than twice within a given period of time [ One OoC month ] will result in a cancerous mutation of the skin which spreads outwards from their "birthmark", along with the individual losing their sight for the rest of that month. Four instances of this occurring will directly result in complete skin deterioration to the point where their body will be covered from head to toe with cancerous sores.

History/Background Story:

"...It traveled far and wide, always seeking those that would become its masters. How many millenia had it been since the upstart had been spouted from the depths of some far off star was still unknown, yet in the core of its being there was the belief of some purpose. So, it searched. Through the cold embrace of space, drifting around the gravitational pull of its high powered cousins, breaking the atmosphere of vast worlds far beyond, and so on and so forth until finally it made its way to this big blue planet we like to call Earth. Once here the creature picked its champion for at last it had found the one that fit just right. There it lie resting until a time of need where its host would call it forth to do great and mighty works that would leave its audience in wonder and marvel. It would be the first of three to visit this wide blue land. In a trinity that bounced from one generation to the other, seeking, pursuing, until they found the ones that fit just right..."


You should have probably used two templates then to avoid confusion.
This is approved on the condition that there is no more then three as you state. I don't want to see this abused by these things popping up everywhere, so just gotta state that.

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Re: [ - Masters of the Universe - ]

PostPosted by Kaitou » Fri Dec 11, 2009 9:27 pm

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